en - > jp! please correct my mistakes
  • i am writing an essay, and since my japanese is beginner i'm really not sure if i do things right.
    could you please correct my mistakes?

    In park, we were laying on the tickly grass, listening to the distant bark of dogs.
    Koen de, kusuguru no kusa no ue ni ansei ni shite ite, inu no tooboe wo kikimashita.

    Bright red squirrels with shiny hair were jumping around and a casual passerby
    cast a stroke of shadow through our faces.
    Kira kira ni suru akage risu ha mawari ni ododotte imashita ga, yukizuri no hito no kage ha
    watashitachi no kao yasashiku wo kakenukemashita.

  • 1. 公園では擽るの草の上で休息して犬の吠え続ける声を聞きました。

    Kouen de wa kusuguru kusa no ue de kyuusoku shite inu no hoetsuzukeru koe wo kikimashita.

    2. 真っ赤な木鼠*は飛び跳ねているが、たまたまに、通行人に影が僕達の顔に落とされました。

    Makka na kinezumi wa tobihanete iru ga, tamatama ni, tsuukounin ni kage ga bokutachi no kao ni ga otosaremashita.

    * キタリス is also a word for red (deep orange) squirrel

    NOTE: You do not usually put an adjective before the を particle (wo yasashiku is better than yasashiku wo).
  • ありがとうございます! especially for the tips, and some words are new to me, that's great too! i'm happy.

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